Saturday, November 26, 2011

poem for miss hancock

Miss Hancock

you are a candle in my life,
light my path,
warm my heart.

Without you,
I lost in the darkness,
I froze by the coldness,
I miss you.

You are a candle in my life,
burning all your life,
giving all your light.

You are so bright, so tiny,
you snuffed in my foolish breath ,
you snuffed in the catty draught.
I cry and moan for the tragedy,
I wish and hope for the rebirth.
But I still miss you.
Best wish

4 comments:

  1. Nice poem, Patrick. It needs grammar work, but it's still a grat job! ^-^

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  2. Great metaphor!
    This was a fairly touching poem.
    Wonderful work!

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  3. hey, where is your blog response to "All the Troubles of the World"? I don't see it.
    Anyway, I liked reading your responses thus far...and would like you to continue to write more content and keep working on ensuring your expression is clear and free of grammatical errors. Your poem had some good examples of parallelism and repetition for effect

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